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It has come to our attention that large chunks of your Assessment Three are from Te Ara pages, specifically https://teara.govt.nz/en/urban-maori/page-1 and https://teara.govt.nz/en/self-government-and-independence/page-2. Although other sources are cited, they do not have page number references. These are serious referencing issues.
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you can makes changes to the essay but please read the comments at the end of the essay before you do as this is a resubmission chance for me
There is only ONE essay question for this topic:
A. What were the four most important developments in the evolution of Aotearoa New Zealand as a nation since 1830, and why do you consider these the most important?
Choose four developments from the following list, or write to your lecturer (keri.mills@aut.ac.nz) to nominate other developments:
He Whakaputanga/ the 1835 Declaration of Independence
The signing of the Treaty of Waitangi
The arrival of the first New Zealand Company immigrants 1839-1852
The passing of the New Zealand Constitution Act 1852
The establishment of Te Kngitanga in the 1850s
The New Zealand wars 1860-1872
The raupatu/confiscation of Mori land in the 1860s
The operation of the Native Land Court between 1860 and 1900
The establishment of the Mori seats in Parliament in 1867
The Vogel programme of increased immigration and infrastructural development in the 1870s
The abolishment of the provincial governments in 1876
The introduction of refrigerated shipping in the 1880s
The development of Parihaka, and its invasion in 1881
The Liberal Government reforms of the 1890s
The suffrage movement and womens inclusion in voting in 1893
The 1905 All Black tour of Britain
The strikes of 1912 & 1913
The First World War
The 1918 Influenza pandemic
The increasing ease of car and air transport 1920-1970
The Great Depression
The 1931 Napier earthquake
The introduction of a welfare system in the 1930s
The Second World War
Mori urban migration 1945-1970
Increased immigration from 1945-1975
The abolishment of the Legislative Council (the upper house) in 1951
The Waterfront Strike of 1951
The introduction of television in 1960
The social movements of the 1960s-80s (Mori renaissance /feminism /environmentalism /peace movement /anti-nuclear /gay rights /anti-racism)
The Dawn Raids of the mid-1970s
Britain joining the European Economic Community in 1973
The Hkoi /Land March in 1975
The Treaty Settlements process 1975-present
The Springbok Tour of 1981
The bombing of the Rainbow Warrior in 1985
The economic reforms of the 1980s & early 1990s
The introduction of the mixed-member proportional (MMP) electoral system in 1993
The Foreshore and Seabed crisis 2002-2011
The abolishment of the Privy Council in 2004
The police raids in Te Urewera in 2007
The 2010/2011 Canterbury earthquakes
The legalisation of same-sex marriage in 2013
The massacre at the Christchurch mosques in 2019
TIPS
Discuss what it means to be a nation use the suggested readings to help you do this (a dictionary definition is not enough here and there is no right answer). You may come to your idea of a nation by choosing your examples first and letting that lead you to a general idea of what you think a nation is. You will still need to refer to other writers to back your ideas up if you do it this way. Consider who is included and excluded in the idea of a nation.
Choose four important events/developments in the evolution of Aotearoa NZ in these years, and make sure you have a case for why they are important in the development of a nation (according to your definition of what a nation is).
Make sure you include a brief description of each event/development, and how it came about. But your main focus should be on the significance of each development for Aotearoa New Zealand as a nation.
Method (slightly different to the previous essays)
INTRODUCTION: Write a brief introductory statement (around 250 words) outlining the topic, and how you will structure your argument in your essay. Some people like to state their argument in the introduction, and others like to leave it to the body and conclusion that is your choice.
BODY: Write around 2000 words on the details of your argument. Organise your argument into paragraphs that have one big point each. Refer to what other scholars (especially historians) have said on this topic, especially noting key areas of agreement and disagreement. Its fine to use a few quotes, but only a few, and keep them short or your essay will lose its flow and your individual voice will not come through.
CONCLUSION: Finish the essay with a short conclusion (around 250 words) which states your argument and sums up the main points youve made in the body of your essay.
Please note these are only guidelines to help you with structure. If you are a confident writer then feel free to experiment! As long as you stick to the word limit (2500 words), your argument comes through clearly and you have good evidence and references to support it, you can get a great mark.